T2+Narrative+Writing

__Plot__ **
 * It was Tuesday 25th December 1987 and it was christmas eve. When santa was gearing up to deilever presents to the little kids. Then he hears a knock on the door and evil elves and big fat evil santa. The army of evil elves take over the workshop. Evil santa tells his present maker to stop making presents and make evil jack in the boxes to scare the kids.
 * The title of my short story is -**

I am writing a Short Story under the theme Tales of Mystery and Suspense. A narrative is a literary text in which a story is told, with the purpose of entertaining, teaching or informing the reader. The story is usually fiction (imaginary), although it may be based on actual events.

**My learning goal is**
 * 1. Is to write a short story and it has to be a narrative not a explanation or a information report.**
 * 2. One of my goals is to write a creative short story and has to be 750 or less words and not to have 751 words or over.**

1. Who, In my story there are a few characters they are, Normal Santa, Evil Santa, Normal Elves, Evil Elves, Jack in the boxes, Brad, Where, My story is set in the north pole at the normal santa's workshop. When, My story takes place 1987 25th of december in the middle of the north pole. What, The evil santa took over the workshop and ruined christmas for 2 years and then the normal santa got the workshop back. 2. What is the problem? Same as What 3. What is the reaction, Santa tries to take back the workshop and after 2 years he does. 4. The outcome Santa ruins christmas and then the normal santa takes the
 * Plot**

Characters


 * Personality
 * Appearance
 * Show not tell (infer)
 * Five senses

To entertain and capture a readers interest.
 * Purpose/Audience**


 * Content & Ideas**
 * My writing will develop a plot: what is going to happen?
 * I can set the scene of my story by describing the setting: Where / When will the story take place.
 * All of my writing needs to link. How will the story begin? What will be the problem? How is the problem going to be resolved?
 * I can articulate my theme / message through my words.

**Series of actions** L.I. To write a short story by where the text follows a series of actions, carried out by well developed main characters, using language features that capture the attention of the reader.
 * Orientation
 * Complication or problem
 * Resolution
 * Planning my Writing** - Development of Plot **- save here**

S.C. 1.) I can see and point out the orientation, complication or problem and resolution within my story. 2.) I can identify good use of descriptive writing, using ‘show and not tell’, action verbs, past tense, use of the senses (smell, hear, see, taste, feel like) 3.) My writing follows a logical sequence to show a series of actions. 4.) I have used correct spelling, punctuation and grammar in my short story. 5.) I have created imagery in my writing by using metaphor, personification, simile and onomatopoeia.

Title SANTA Take over

Narrative

__**Short Story Writing**__

The day is here. All the kids shouting and screaming because santa's coming to night but its not just a ordinary night. All the kids had told santa what they wanted for christmas, the question is will they get there presents that they asked for? At santa's workshop they are getting all the presents. The next second they heard the loudest bang anyone has ever heard before, then elves jack in the boxes and a evil santa ran into the workshop and took over. The evil santa tied up the good santa and took over the workshop. The present makers for the evil santa made lots of scary jack in the boxes and they wrapped them up and put them in santa's sleigh. At 11:00 o clock santa left around the world to deliver the presents to the good kids. By 3 o'clock evil santa was back at the workshop asleep while all the kids were really excited to open there presents and see what they got. All the kids woke up exited, when they started opening there presents jack in the boxes flew open and there eyes started to glow Red. The kids ran back to bed and went to sleep again. Evil santa woke up the next morning all excited about what had happened that night. At lunch time santa got a phone call from the evil elves leader saying that 7 of the elves had gone missing in the night. Santa straight away said it was those nice people who we kicked out of the workshop! Santa thought of how they could get them back and also why do they need them. The evil elves were found at a police jail in New Zealand for making presents and scary little kids and making them run back to bed. Santa tried to free them out of jail but that didn’t work because they had made little kids have bad dreams. The police wouldn’t free them because they had made parents get no sleep because there kids were screaming because they had night mares. Santa sent in Brad and said ill take these evils into my home and make sure they behave. The police gave the elves over. Brad got the elves and took them back to santa for a reward of $10,000. Brad is now santa’s little secret little spy who can find out any information cause he can transform into a mini person and sneak into small places. Brad is hired for Santa because santa sleeps most of the year and Bard leads the workshop and keeps control over the elves and the present makers. Brad just found out some very important news that santa needs to know fast it was about the other santa coming back to steal the workshop. He woke up santa as quick as he could, santa woke up in a grump but he got ready as quick as he could to defend his workshop. Santa started to find a hiding place so he could just pop out and scare them away. Santa found a hiding spot behind the present maker. When santa heard them open the door he jumped out and took them by surprise and roped up santa again and all his little helpers ran out and away, evil santa kidnapped santa and kept him hostage for the rest of the year.

1 Year later that evening 5:00pm!

Santa was getting ready to do his present delivering to the kids around the world. Santa had packed and was ready to go when he heard a phone call and someone asking for him to bring a new skate board and the brand ABC. Santa left the workshop and started to get the presents to the little kiddies and he got around the world by 6:30 and got to the workshop at 6:45. The little kids got up and opened there presents and some of them got what they wanted and some of them didn’t.

The Next day later

In the end it was the nice santa who had tied up the good santa and everyone got good presents not bad. The evil santa is now working for the nice santa checking the good and bad list and he gets paid $500 a year and he’s getting good pay to buy food for him.

The next day The Santa’s went skiing out in the north pole and both santa’s were really good at skiing.

**Teacher Comment**

I think Rhys wrote a really good short story there was nothing bad about it. Some of the parts were very creative and i liked the part where evil santa took over the workshop and tried to catch the normal santa. I also like the part where you said the santa tied up the santa and I thought it was cool how you did that cause i didn't know what santa was tied up.**
 * Peer assessment

I think I achieved my learning goals because I wrote a good short narrative and it wasn't a explanation or a information report. It was also just over 750 or just on 750 which was good because I didn't go over the limit of the words and I would of been able to enter the compertition. I also think my story is very creative because this wouldn't really happen in real world and santa isn't even true but some people still think he is
 * Self assessment - Ideas**

Assessment Short Story


 * audience and purpose 4P

You engage the audience and hold their attention. Your narrator ‘voice’ may clearly be heard and make the reader react. The world you create is consistent and readers can relate to it.

content and ideas 4B

You have included all the elements of orientation, complication, resolution and sometimes climax and coda. Most description and detail is appropriate and helps sustain the interest of your readers.

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 * structure important elements: orientation, complication, resolution **
 * Others: **

** rising action ** coda You have sequenced the plot according to narrative structure and have linked using adverbs, conjunctions or phrases that make your story flow. You use SEE paragraphs and link ideas.
 * climax **
 * falling action **

** language 4B **

‘ use’ means it must be there. It does not mean ‘punctuate accurately’ as this is marked under surface features.

Your choice of language and style features enhance your storytelling. You begin to use language devices -figurative and parts of speech-to engage and add detail.

**Development of Plot It was Tuesday 25th December 1987 and it was christmas eve. When santa was gearing up to deilever presents to the little kids. Then he hears a knock on the door and evil elves and big fat evil santa. The army of evil elves take over the workshop. Evil santa tells his present maker to stop making presents and make evil jack in the boxes to scare the kids.**

Santa Clause (evil) - Me Todd Evil Minion - Santa's Evil Present maker - Anthony Evil elves Leader - Erin Evil Elves - Alisha Nice Santa - Ethan Evil Jack in the box || Christmas Santa's Work shop North pole || Christmas 1987 At santa's Work shop north pole || Evil santa takes over and is now santa and doesn't delievers presents he deilevers scary presents and evil presents || No one gets presents any more until they can get good santa back People get scary jack in the boxes || with a bunch of little kids to help him fight the evil santa. || Evil santa is now the santa and the nice santa can never ever come back and he becomes just a normal human again and he doesn't have his powers to get around the world in one day. He also finds a house to live and has a happy ending while the evil santa is just relaxing and doing nothing and controls the north pole/ the workshop and his evil minion and evil evles. ||
 * **Setting**
 * Action**
 * Action**
 * Action** ||
 * Who is involved
 * Where does it take place?
 * When does it happen?
 * What happens?
 * What is the problem?
 * What is the reaction? Evil santa kicks nice santa out of the workshop and nice santa goes to find help and he comes back
 * The outcome


 * What do The characters look like

Evil Santa - Glowing red eyes Black and red highlights Fat Black Suit Red boots Evil Elves Leader - Short, normal Ears, Red glowing eyes, Fangs - Red Evil Minion - Just taller than the elves, Red glowing eyes, Horns on top of head - red Evil Elves - Pointy ears, Glowing eyes , black horns top of head , Controled by Evil evles leader Evil Present Maker - Tall, Big hands , Evil eyes - Black , Really evil Nice Santa - Fat white beard, Yellow eyes , Red suit Nice Elves White Hair Yellow eyes Short Pointy ears**